This is my entry for Susanna Hill’s Valentiny contest. It is a 214 word story about curiosity on Valentine’s Day.
Valumtime’s Day
It showed up at our front door on Tuesday. The box was wrapped in brown paper and smelled like dirt. I can’t read the squiggles yet, but I see my name written in black on the top. Mom said that I’ve got to wait until Valumtime’s Day to open it. But that’s two sleeps from now!
Each morning, I eat cereal and stare at the box for me on the kitchen table. When mom isn’t looking, I try to peek through a tiny tear in the paper, but all I can see is a brown box. I bet it’s from Dad. He’s being a hero far away.
Then it’s Valumtime’s Day. I run to the kitchen and mom says I have to eat my cereal first, but I’m not hungry. She giggles and lets me open my box first.
I tear off the paper, but mom has to help me use scissors to cut open the tape. She does it slowly so she doesn’t break anything inside or hurt anyone.
When she’s done, I open the box. Wrapped inside is a pink Teddy bear and a card with a different pink bear holding a flower. I can’t read the card, but I see Dad and hearts written at the bottom. Best Valumtime’s Day ever!
What a sweet story. Love the word Valumtime’s. Good luck!
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Awww! What a sweet story. I really like the phrase “two sleeps from now.”
Good luck in the contest!!
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Love the two sleeps from now part. The hubby and I used to tell our daughter how many sleeps until something :0) Best Wishes!
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You captured the little kid’s voice perfectly!
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Such a cute story. Nicely done! Best wishes on the contest!
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Sweet!
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Great kid voice and so much heart! Great job.
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What a sweet story & reminder that many families are separated for holidays and birthdays.
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I love the voice. Captured a child’s voice perfectly. Also, I was curious as to what was in the box. Great job!
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So sweet! Lovely use of voice. Good luck to you!
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So sweet. A treat to see so clearly into the heart of a child. good luck!
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Aw, so sweet. And so hard when a parent isn’t there on special days. Great job!
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This is such a sweet story!
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Thank you!
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Aw! Such a sweet story, Matthew. You captured a young child’s voice nicely with “Valumtimes” Day and his daddy being a hero far away, and I was curious right along with your character waiting find out what was in that box! Thanks for joining in the Valentiny fun!
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